From the Writers Write Facebook page, I saw a writing prompt that I decided to try. It fits in rather well with Hitchhiker, though it may not necessarily be in the finished book.
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Guess what antagonist I chose? Richard!!!!
Here it goes.
"Adrian didn't want to leave me behind."
Richard's eyes flew open. He grunted and shook his head, trying to clear Cameron's words from his dreams, but they haunted him like a phantom. In fact, they hadn't left him all day, since the moment Cameron spoke them. "Why?" he muttered. Never in all his wicked life had he been affected by his victims. Life had always been so easy to terminate, the human body so frail and easy to break. He'd been sure he had managed to bury his conscience, which had only ever hindered him from his work, under a crust of insensitivity and coldness. What was this feeling? Where did these second thoughts come from? Why was he having doubts?
By now he had roused himself too much to go back to sleep. He sat up and swung his long legs over the side of the bed, rubbing his face with his hands. In the darkness, he could see the scene from earlier that day playing out. Cameron was sitting in a chair, surrounded by armed guards. Richard himself was standing in front of him, taunting him, but Cameron merely folded his arms and looked straight ahead. Lucy walked into the room. At this, Richard frowned in disgust. He hated Lucy, that conceited, foolish, ignorant, conniving little spy...she abraded him to no end.
Suddenly very irritated, he got up and, leaning on the basin in the corner of his bedroom, he splashed cool water on his face. Tomorrow would be an eventful day; he couldn't afford to develop a conscience. Looking into the mirror, he barely discerned his face in the blackness, with his sharp forehead and a nose that Lucy found it pleasing to sock from time to time. Richard gripped the edge of the sink in frustration. He felt trapped between traitorous thoughts and his violent lifestyle that was strangely showing itself in a new light.
Suddenly he grinned. At least now there was someone sitting in a cell on whom, tomorrow, he would vent his anger.
Or will I?
The words stole into his mind like a poison. Unable to shake the feeling of guilt, he struck the mirror repeatedly with his fist until it cracked, then shattered, leaving his knuckles bloody and torn. He paid no attention, panting and staring at the monster in the jagged shards of glass as he realized the question was not "would he do that" but "could he."
Could he do that to Cameron? Could he continue to be a monster?
As always, I appreciate, love, and encourage feedback! Please no one cry like I almost did while writing this...sorry this post was late and, as always, sorry for the briefness!
-Ashley
OH MY GOSH THIS IS BRILLAINT THE FEELS THE PAIN OF HIS AWFUL LIFE CRUEL PITY GAAAAHHHHHH *goes insane from fangirling and feels*
ReplyDeleteYou are hilarious. I love you.
DeleteHaha, back at ya. ;)
Delete*Tries to regain some composure* Ash, this was a truly amazing bit of writing!! I'm being perfectly honest with you, I would have never thought to write it this way--the description!! Wow!! I would of told you how he was feeling, not showed it--the better route. You got across to the reader all of his confusion and mixed feelings and all of that just by writing his actions. Mark my words, Ashley Marie McNutt--you WILL be a brilliant, famous author one day. It may take years for those stupid publishers to accept your work (hard to trust them when they publish so much crap), but you WILL be an amazing author. I'm not just saying that, I truly believe it with all of my heart.
ReplyDeleteAw, thank you!!!!!!! :) :) :) thanks a lot! :D
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DeleteI almost cried, Ashley! This is one of the first things of yours that I've read, and it was amazing! I love Richard! I feel sorry for him! He's so tormented! I hope he becomes a good guy! Keep it up! It's great! You're such a good writer! Honestly, I wish I could write like that! <3
ReplyDeleteAwwwwww!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks Megan!!! :) :) :) :) :) :) :)
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